Armed with online writing group Tuesday Tales’ seventeenth prompt ‘chest’, my eleventh short story for them, I got writing and below is the result.
Tuesday Tales provides a new prompt each week, the members write a story inspired by it and post it on our blogs / websites. Then we email the link and first two or three sentences to Jean Joachim. She then posts them on the Tuesday Tales blog (on a Tuesday
), gives us the link, then we go out and shout about it. So, without further ado, here is my 316-word second-person story.
Siesta
You can’t help staring at his chest. Only a mammoth has more hair than Eddie. It’s the only thing you dislike about his body so you close your eyes and think of proverbial England… the country of your birth… the country you miss, despite everything you have here.
Eddie mistakes your closed eyes for ecstasy and gives one last thrust, groaning as he does so, then flops back to his side of the bed and promptly falls asleep, the effort clearly too much. He puts his constant lethargy down to advancing years but you tell him that fifty is the new thirty so he’s thirty-two. You put it down to his sedentary lifestyle, easily done where you are, except you go out and find things to do. Solo but not solo, enjoying other people’s company but wishing it was Eddie’s.
You look at the expanse of hair – more of it, it seems, due to his expanding girth – and you watch it rise and fall. The mouth above it whimpers and you catch your name. Soft, romantic, like you know Eddie to be… under all that hair. He’s grown his head hair long, dark like his chest, looks like a rock star only he doesn’t play the guitar so well.
Leaning in, you smell the still-evident aftershave, the last of the Duty Free. You rub his chest, determined to make friends with the mammoth, remind yourself that Eddie can be an animal in bed when he’s not so tired, then your hand stops… replays, just to be sure, and it is sure. You’re sure. You’ve felt this before… with Frank. Images flood your brain: beeping machines, shaking heads, forms to sign.
You feel a sensation in your nose, you always do before you cry, but you sniff away the tears as Eddie opens his eyes.
You smile, kiss his chest, then go downstairs to make the dinner.
This story is one of twelve to be found here.
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dakotatrace
April 3, 2012 at 2:10 pm
Love imagery you created with this weeks’s post and the unexpected twist with Frank.
Dakota
morgenbailey
April 3, 2012 at 6:58 pm
Thank you, Dakota. He just appeared… as they do.
Sherry Gloag
April 3, 2012 at 4:47 pm
You always create a question at the end don’t you. Great TT.
morgenbailey
April 3, 2012 at 4:54 pm
They say you should make your readers think, so thank you, Sherry.
patricialogan
April 3, 2012 at 8:50 pm
Well done, Morgen. I just love those older “silver bears”. Maybe that’s because I’m fifty but I just can’t get enough of them. Nicely writtten!
morgenbailey
April 3, 2012 at 10:57 pm
I’m not far off (45 mid-August). I’m so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you, Patricia.
Jean
April 3, 2012 at 9:53 pm
Love the imagery and Eddie, too. Sweet, sensual and then the twist. Love you kept me hanging. Great TT Morgen.
morgenbailey
April 3, 2012 at 10:58 pm
Thank you, Jean. It’s funny how something just tumbles out and creates three lives (well, two and a bit). So many characters to revisit…
rawiyaerotica
April 3, 2012 at 10:41 pm
Well written and descriptive!
morgenbailey
April 3, 2012 at 11:01 pm
Thank you, Rawiya. I’m constantly surprised by how much can be said in so few words. I love flash fiction and am so grateful to Jean, for inviting me to TT.
Lindsay
April 3, 2012 at 11:44 pm
Great description of Eddie.
morgenbailey
April 4, 2012 at 8:06 am
Thank you, Lindsay.
Tai
April 4, 2012 at 4:05 am
Eddie reminds me of my “mammoth” of a man. Very well written.
morgenbailey
April 4, 2012 at 8:06 am
I love that, thank you, Tai.
Iris
April 4, 2012 at 7:28 am
I always look forward to reading your TT – and you did not disappoint, Morgen!
morgenbailey
April 4, 2012 at 8:07 am
Thank you very much, Iris. I am SO behind reading everyone’s and it’s not through lack of wanting to – I left my job just over 2 weeks ago and have literally spent that time dealing with emails but my four novels are now screaming so I’m going to have a productive day today then treat myself – shorts are after all what I love to read and write.