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Originally posted on Morgen's Online Short Story Writing Group:

Welcome to Morgen’s Online Short Story Writing Group and the second story on this blog. This 1,796-word literary story is by John McGowan. Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this story and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

Comment / feedback sought: John is hoping to find out what works and what does not work with this piece of work, and welcomes suggestions for how it could be improved.

The Coffin Route

He had made a promise and you do not break a promise. That had been instilled into him in his childhood. So though an oppressive sky, thick and heavy with grey rainclouds smothered the hilltops and blunted the grey crags, making the world feel that bit smaller. Though the wind blustered a cold threat to stay indoors and the…

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Originally posted on Morgen's Online Novel Writing Group:

Yvonne newWelcome to Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group and the first novel extract submitted for this blog (yesterday’s was a replay of a Red Pen Critique). :) This 837-word extract is by epic fantasy novelist Yvonne Hertzberger. Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this story and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

The Dreamt Child: Book Three of Earth’s Pendulum

Synopsis: Liannis is the goddess Earth’s seer and servant. In this excerpt she has been living alone with a horse and kestrel, with whom she can ‘mind-speak’ for the entire winter – recovering from the trials of the past two years (Book Two). Merrist, her peg-legged servant, with Earth’s help, has located her and now must inform her she must to return to society and to her duties.

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