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10 Jan

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Yvonne would love your feedback!

Originally posted on Morgen's Online Novel Writing Group:

Yvonne newWelcome to Morgen’s Online Novel Writing Group and the first novel extract submitted for this blog (yesterday’s was a replay of a Red Pen Critique). :) This 837-word extract is by epic fantasy novelist Yvonne Hertzberger. Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this story and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!

The Dreamt Child: Book Three of Earth’s Pendulum

Synopsis: Liannis is the goddess Earth’s seer and servant. In this excerpt she has been living alone with a horse and kestrel, with whom she can ‘mind-speak’ for the entire winter – recovering from the trials of the past two years (Book Two). Merrist, her peg-legged servant, with Earth’s help, has located her and now must inform her she must to return to society and to her duties.

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Posted by on January 10, 2013 in writing

 

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  1. Jane Risdon

    January 10, 2013 at 4:10 pm

    I’m not normally a reader of this genre either but it gripped me and was well written, this is only the second piece in this genre I have ever read.. Good luck Yvonne.

     
    • Yvonne Hertzberger

      January 10, 2013 at 5:23 pm

      Thank you, Jane. It’s not a popular genre but I love it. Glad you liked the excerpt.

       
      • morgenbailey

        January 10, 2013 at 5:29 pm

        Don’t say that out loud, Yvonne – thousands of fantasy writers (inc. JRR Tolkein fans) would say it’s incredibly popular. :)

         
      • Yvonne Hertzberger

        January 10, 2013 at 10:15 pm

        Thanks Morgen. I wish some of them would find me. :)

         
  2. morgenbailey

    January 10, 2013 at 10:21 pm

    :( You could write some guest blogs for me. :)

     
  3. morgenbailey

    January 11, 2013 at 7:53 am

    Hi Yvonne.

    A guest blog is generally <1,000 words on an 'educational' writing-related topic plus bio & pics (which I have). Details on http://morgenbailey.wordpress.com/submission-information/opportunities-on-this-blog but if you look at http://morgenbailey.wordpress.com/guest-blogs and/or http://morgenbailey.wordpress.com/guest-blogs/topics, you'll see what people have done already.

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