Lesley and I look forward to reading your feedback…
Originally posted on Morgen's Online Script Writing Group:
Welcome to Morgen’s Online Script Writing Group and the first script extract on this blog. This 1454-word extract is by writer and artist Lesley Fletcher.
Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this extract and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated! I do have some feedback but I’ve just included it (below the story) as links to the scans of my handwritten-notes so I can let others comment here without being influenced by me.
Lesley says… the play is about a woman who crosses a strong moral line in order to suit her own (daughter`s) needs. Should this portion posted come at the beginning of the play and then each act work toward what happened to cause this scene or would it be better to lead to the end from the beginning which would show the mother`s cards gradually?