Welcome to Flash Fiction Friday and the one hundred and eleventh piece in this series. This week’s is a 191-worder by Jane Risdon. This story will be podcasted in episode 35 (with two other stories and some 6-worders) on Sunday 29th December.
Changing the Guard (c) Jane Risdon 2013
Sam ‘the stiletto’ Musso waited until the noise died down before clearing his throat and looking up from his notes.
‘We are agreed. No more discussion, no more voting. Sonny Versace is toast.’ Hands and cutlery thudded on the white clothed tables as the various Families showed their approval.
‘Don Giacanni, ‘The South-side Chapter,’ has elected to make the arrangements. He has given the honour of ‘retiring’ Sonny to his trusty foot-soldier, ‘Arturo, ‘I invoke the Fifth’ Giovanni.’ Cheering and more table banging followed as Sam smiled at the white-haired Don sitting at the table opposite.
The only female Don watched carefully as her fellow Dons made their way out of the dining room. They suspected nothing. Those sitting with her began discussing who would have the largest slice of Sonny’s part of the city. She waited, silent, amused.
Without warning Sam fell forward onto the table, as dead as he could be. Before the others could react, they too fell forward; dead.
Sophia, ‘the nurse,’ sat quietly, listening to the sounds of gunfire and screams coming from outside. Her foot-soldiers had succeeded, and she was now undisputed Don of Dons.
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I asked Jane what prompted this piece and she said…
This short story was written for one of my writing group competitions which had a maximum word count of 200 words. I enjoy a challenge.
Anyone who has read anything I’ve written or seen interviews with me will know I’ve spent most of my life in the Music Business and you will have noticed a number of references to ‘certain’ people who’ve crossed my path during those years; I suppose my love of crime, mystery and espionage has to come out somehow and mixing my experience of ‘certain’ people with one or other of these much loved themes is too good to miss.
I heard of a Mafia trial in Italy on the News and I guess it must have sparked my imagination. Talk of who would take the place of the Don now in custody, and suddenly I thought about a female Don. I’ve no idea if they exist or could exist in such a male dominated world, but what a thought!
My favourite movie is ‘Some Like it Hot,’ – the birthday party scene came to mind; machine gunner emerging from the cake as they all celebrated at the long table.
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I loved it (as always). Thank you, Jane.
Jane Risdon began writing seriously three years ago after a life spent in the International Music Industry where she managed recording artists, record producers and songwriters from all over the world.
Putting her own wishes to write on hold throughout her Music career had unseen benefits in that she has garnered a wealth of material for her stories. She now has time to write crime and mysteries and has three novels on the go at the moment. Another is a co-written novel with an award winning author and which she hopes will be published in 2014.
Jane has also had short stories published in various anthologies in aid of charity and has another anthology due out in 2014 involving authors from across the globe. She also writes flash fiction and her short stories and flash fiction stories have been published and pod-cast on the internet frequently. These stories are often, but not always, crime related and she often writes humorous short stories based on her observations of characters she has met or knew in the past – heavily disguised of course.
Married to a musician and being involved in the Music Industry for many years, travelling and living in many countries including SE Asia, China, USA and Europe, Jane draws on all her experiences for her writing.
You can find out more about Jane and her writing from:
Facebook Author page: http://www.facebook.com/JaneRisdon2
Author Blog on WordPress: http://janerisdon.wordpress.com
Various publications and podcasts: https://morgenbailey.wordpress.com/?s=Jane+Risdon
I Am Woman Anthology vol 1 available: http://www.amazon.co.uk/The-Woman-Anthology-Anthologies-ebook/dp/B00817P8DI / http://www.amazon.com/The-Woman-Anthology-Anthologies-ebook/dp/B00817P8DI
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There was not a wasted word in this story. Fortunate are the students in Jane’s writing classes for they are exposed to a skilled artisan of the flash story.
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Mike, thanks for your kind words. I am really happy you enjoyed the story. I do not run writing classes but I belong to a group of writers who stage the odd competition and share their work from time to time. But I am thrilled you thought I might aspire to teaching. Many thanks. 🙂
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loved the story as usual Jane, I don’t know where you get the ideas from !!
Thank you to Morgen as well.
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Thanks Val, I am really happy you read this and enjoyed it….I will pay you later!!
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Brilliantly succinct Jane. Having attended Creative Writing classes in the past this is such a good exercise and proves how all the ingredients for a story can be effectively captured in so few words if they are the right ones!
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Hi Jo, lovely to see you commenting. Many thanks for your kind words which I really appreciate. I don’t belong to a writing group in the sense of being taught etc…we are a group of like-minded writers who share our work and do the odd competition but we are not involved in lessons of any kind. But you are right, FF really makes you think about every word you write. You know all about creating a wonderful story, your own work is brilliant.
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Thank you very much, Mike, Val, Jo. I’ve passed your comments on to Jane.
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Many thanks Morgen for hosting me and for passing these lovely comments on to me; appreciated as ever.
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You’re very welcome, Jane. Thank you for being a stalwart of my blog… one day I’ll reciprocate!
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My pleasure Morgen and you have done more than I ever expected…I should thank you. And I do 🙂
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Morgen – Thanks for posting Jane’s story.
Jane – What a great story! I love the twist at the end, and you give a great sense of atmosphere.
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Margot, your kind words are most appreciated. I am glad you loved the twist. I do try and keep you on the edge of your seats or at least lulled into a false sense of where the story is going. Glad if it worked.
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Jane this gives a whole new meaning to the last supper. Italians do love a fest don’t they? (loved it)
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Indeed it does. I am glad you enjoyed it. I had Some Like it Hot in mind when I wrote it, the scene where the gangsters are meeting after the St. Valentine’s Day Massacre…a birthday party and the cake comes in, a guy pops out of it with the machine gun blazing and the last sight of one of the Don’s is his black and white spats sliding under the table! Also, I think you may have deduced that working in Music in the USA I have come across a few of these characters along the way and so I am familiar with their ways!! LOL Thanks so much for reading and commenting; really pleased you took time out. 🙂
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Am so glad you enjoyed it Lesley. I know what you mean…those Italian dinners eh!! Glad you liked it.
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I was inspired with the Italian theme and so wrote my own story in my writing workshop. It was a hit. Get it? A hit. 😀
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I love the idea of a Hit and if you get dinner with it then a double hit..lol
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😀 – I am going to edit and post it some time soon (maybe, hopefully, absolutely)
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Looking forward to it…I love anything that is going to be a HIT and especially when written by someone who enjoys the whole things LOL…bang bang.
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Love it… Jane has a wonderful style and talent.
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Thanks so much for taking time to visit Morgen’s blog and to read my piece. I am thrilled you enjoyed it and Cheshire-cat pleased with your kind remarks. Do come again!! 🙂
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Really enjoyed that, Jane 🙂
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Susan, so kind of you to read it. Glad you liked it. Thanks.
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Morgen – Thanks so much for this great feature! And Jane – a terrific story. I love the twist at the end of it.
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So glad you popped over Margot and enjoyed it. I do love a twist in the tale…sometimes I twist myself up in knots and meet myself coming back! 🙂
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