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Story A Day May 2012: May 9th – The photographer that no-one else can get

Late April 2011 I discovered http://StoryADay.org and the project that is to write 31 stories in 31 days. Anyone who knows me or follows this blog, knows how passionate I am about short stories so my clichéd eyes lit up at this new marvel. And just a few days later there I was, breathing life into new characters. This went on to become (with some editing of course) my 31-story collection eBook Story A Day May 2011.

And here we are a year later doing it all over again. Today’s prompt was to write a story with an unreliable narrator, so here is my 594-worder following on from my Tuesday Tales story, The photo that no-one else can get.

The photographer that no-one else can get

“She told me she loved me.”

“Diana?”

The old man nodded.

The journalism student noted it down. “When was that?”

“August 19th 1997, my birthday.”

“But that’s…”

“I know. A couple of weeks before…”

“Where were you?”

“Paris. She came here a lot.”

“With Dodi?”

The old man nodded again. “She said she was going to leave him but…”

“Go on.”

“She couldn’t.”

“Why couldn’t she?”

“I can’t tell you, I promised.”

“It won’t do anyone any harm now, not after all these years.”

“She has family. Grand children… great grand children soon. No, it’ll never come out.”

“But you’re telling me now.”

“You won’t believe me and you won’t say anything, or print it. It’s too big a risk from an old fool.”

“I do believe you, Mr…”

“James. Call me, James.”

“But I… oh. I’m Naomi. I do believe you, Mr James, that’s why I’m here.”

“Not Mr, just James. Then you’ll know about the photographs, and the car.”

“Car?”

“My old white Fiat. Long gone. A square cube of metal used as someone’s coffee table no doubt.”

“So there was…”

“I read about it in the papers of course, so someone must have seen me but nothing ever happened. I waited, hid the car in a deserted barn until I knew the coast was clear then gave it to a scrap dealer on the condition he’d strip it for parts then crush it. He was a friend of a friend so I believed him. Never heard anything so…”

“And you have photographs?”

“Of course. Loads. Not printed, couldn’t have evidence lying around so I left them on the stick. I didn’t need to print them anyway, or ever look at them again. I have them all… up here,” he said, tapping his forehead.

“Where is it now, the stick?”

“In the car.”

Staring out to the car park, Naomi asked, “You still drive?”

The old man laughed. “No! Don’t be silly, dear. I’m knocking on 100. In the Fiat. The stick never came to light either so it’s probably underneath someone’s News of the World or remote control.”

“They don’t make the News of…” She looked up when the Manager, a tall plump woman with a red face, blocked the light from the window.

“Sorry folks, but it’s meal time.”

Naomi was about to ask another question, expecting to have a few minutes’ grace, when the Manager coughed overdramatically.

Closing her notebook, Naomi tucked it, along with her royal blue fountain pen, into her messenger bag. “Thank you, James. Do you mind if I come back another time?”

“Certainly dear, but don’t leave it too long. As I said I’m knocking…”

“I’ll see you out,” the Manager butted in and the two women walked towards the building’s exit.

“Get everything you wanted?”

“Almost.”

“Which name did he give you?”

“James…”

“Ah, it’s 007 is it today? Ms Windsor, we’ve had a stream of people here to see him over the years. Since he started saying… well, everything he’s just told you. Don’t believe a word of it. We let them in, let you in, to keep him amused so I’m sorry that you’ve wasted your time but he just loves to make things up, bordering on cruel if you ask me, trying to make people believe his lies.”

But of course the man wasn’t lying. He just had a bad memory. He’d been going by different names all his life. Never knew what his real one was, having been left in a handbag in a cloakroom in Victoria Railway Station.

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