Short story no.3 for critique is now online… we look forward to your comments.
Originally posted on Morgen's Online Short Story Writing Group:
Welcome to Morgen’s Online Short Story Writing Group and the third story on this blog. This 3,100-word piece is by literary author, poet, interviewee and first contributor to ‘Novel Nights In‘ Rose Mary Boehm.
Please do comment in the section below telling us what you liked about this story and, what if anything, the author could do to improve upon it. Thank you – it’s very much appreciated!
I do have some feedback but I’ve just included it (below the story) as links to the scans of my handwritten-notes so I can let others comment here without being influenced by me. :)
Mrs Boffa moves slowly. An old black overcoat barely protects her squat, heavy body from the worst of the London winter. Sharp air uses the high buildings packed tightly on either side of the street as a wind tunnel. Around her head and ears…
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