Today’s book review, of Casey Locke’s erotic short story, is brought to you by yours truly, Morgen Bailey.
‘Running Free’ by Casey Locke
Synopsis: Lena has run away from her abusive boyfriend with little idea of where she will end up or what she will do with her life. She has only ever dreamed of escaping. When she finally breaks free in the middle of the night and hitches a ride with a very handsome stranger, she has no idea that the man who picks her up also saves her, in a very special way. Shane himself, has no clue what’s in store for him after he picks Lena up. He is also on his way of escaping a life of discontent. He will not reveal to anyone what his plans are or why he’s getting out of town, but he is a good man deep down and it becomes apparent that his giving Lena a ride is a form of rescue. A slightly unlikely friendship is forged in their travel. Neither of them is thinking too far in the future, neither is looking for anything other than a better life. The only certain thing between them is an undeniable chemistry and a need to please one another in the best way possible. The real question is whether or not they will ever cross paths again.
‘Running Free’ is available from http://www.amazon.co.uk/Running-Free-Casey-Locke-ebook/dp/B00BQKFFSA and http://www.amazon.com/Running-Free-Casey-Locke-ebook/dp/B00BQKFFSA.
Chapter One (of three) introduces us to Lena escaping Rick, her alcoholic partner – not your usual erotica start – although I took more notice at the mention of a handgun but then we had the clichéd looking in the mirror to reveal her appearance. I struggled with the speed at which Lena and Shane got together, especially as she’d just left a bad relationship. It didn’t endear me to her, which as a reader I’d need to do.
I queried whether eyes could be bloodshot from crying and http://caloriecount.about.com/forums/health-support/crying-causes-blood-shot-eyes assures me they can, if the crying is excessive enough.
The story could do with some editing (but then I would say that being an editor) for example they’re in a truck but at one point we have the description of their ‘car window’.
Although I was reading this story for the purpose of reviewing it, I did want to keep turning the page. Characters should ‘find’ themselves by the end of a story so this had a good resolution – I would have liked more of a plot between her old life and her new one, and at a mere 17 Kindle pages for £0.99 (the same price as my 100,000-word chick lit novel), there’s plenty of room. Having three chapters in such a short piece, I felt was also a little unnecessary – as if it were trying to be a novel – just spaces (or asterisks) between the three sections would have been sufficient.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Based in Northamptonshire, England, Morgen Bailey (“Morgen with an E”) is a prolific blogger, podcaster, editor / critiquer, Chair of NWG (which runs the annual H.E. Bates Short Story Competition), Head Judge for the NLG Flash Fiction Competition and creative writing tutor for her local county council. She is also a freelance author of numerous ‘dark and light’ short stories, novels, articles, and very occasional dabbler of poetry. Like her, her blog, https://morgenbailey.wordpress.com, is consumed by all things literary. She is also active on Twitter, Facebook along with many others (listed on her blog’s Contact page). She also recently created five online writing groups and an interview-only blog.
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