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The Plane Trip by Roy A Teel Jnr
Synopsis: As parents, who hasn’t taken their child on so many firsts? From the first car ride to the first day of school. There is nothing more precarious than taking your son on his first plane trip. This is the story of Jonathan. Dad is a frequent flyer; Mom so-so, and Jonathan… well… he has never been in a jetliner before. Only the imagination of a seven-year-old can turn a routine flight into a laugh out loud journey between the Fifth dimension and Hell, and somewhere in between, father and son bond in a most humorous way.
Review (of the eBook via the Kindle’s text-to-speech function)
Written in first person viewpoint, past tense, the story is just nineteen Kindle pages, so this is not going to be a long review.
The synopsis sums up the whole story well, and there really isn’t a lot more to add. The exchanges between father and son are amusing, and the father’s observations of his surroundings are well written.
Regular readers of these reviews will know that I have a bugbear for ‘well’ starting a sentence in dialogue. In this very short short story there are eight. It feels like every time the father speaks to his son, the father starts the sentence with ‘well’. Perhaps it is something that the author uses himself because it is also in the synopsis!
There are also ‘began to’ and ‘started to’ where they are not needed, eg began to call seat numbers, the plane began to accelerate… where the action is actually happening (rather than being interrupted) so the ticket agent called seat numbers and the plane accelerated would be neater.
As the story is written in first person viewpoint, we are learning the facts as the main character learned them. However, he mentions that the air stewardess has come to offer him drinks, then a few moments later seems surprised that she has come to take his order.
It is an entertaining short short story. I downloaded it for free back in December 2014. It is currently (December 2015) $2 or £1.29 which I feel is far too expensive, even for a publisher published story (although the cover looks very amateurly made), and possibly why my review is the first given on Amazon.co.uk.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Based in Northamptonshire, England, Morgen Bailey (“Morgen with an E”) is a prolific blogger, podcaster, editor / critiquer, 2015 Head Judge for the annual H.E. Bates Short Story Competition, Head Judge for the NLG Flash Fiction Competition and creative writing tutor for her local county council. She is also a freelance author of numerous ‘dark and light’ short stories, novels, articles, and very occasional dabbler of poetry. Like her, her blog, https://morgenbailey.wordpress.com, is consumed by all things literary. She is also active on Twitter, Facebook along with many others (listed on her blog’s Contact page) and has created five online writing groups and an interview-only blog.
Her debut novel is the chick lit eBook The Serial Dater’s Shopping List ($0.99 / £0.77) and she has nine others (mostly crime) in the works. She also has eight collections of short stories available (also $0.99 / £0.77 each) – detailed on https://morgenbailey.wordpress.com/books-mine/short-stories.
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