Welcome to Post-weekend Poetry and the one hundred and thirty-third poem in this series. This week’s piece is by seventh-grader Mirha Saleem.
Deepest Loss by Mirha Saleem
I knew when I first saw her she looked like another me,
But yet so jolly and so carefree,
Whereas I was quite serious and scholarly,
I don’t know how it started but our bond grew strong,
I knew this was the place where I belong,
Years passed by and our friendship reached to the extreme,
But now it looks like a lost daydream.
Someone came and interrupted my life,
The agony was fiercer than being stabbed by a knife,
Watching her gradually going away from me,
After that everything happened so quickly,
How would you feel losing a best friend?
Too late for the mistakes to amend,
Every time I see her, my heart breaks apart,
No words to explain the emotions of my heart,
Now that she’s away it brings tears to my eyes,
How long can I keep myself in disguise?
Seeing her with someone else the way we used to be,
From this discomfort will I ever be free,
After all our years together is that the reward I get,
This worry follows me everywhere like a threat,
I wish I had known what trust would lead to,
I wish someone had given me a clue,
I learned not to trust anyone entirely,
For the pain to resist cannot be conquered easily.
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I asked Mirha what prompted this piece and she said…
I love poetry and the poem I am sending you is mainly about my own experience (as I believe that a best piece of writing is the one the author has experienced). This poem is actually about trust.
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Mirha is in the seventh grade at school. Wasn’t her poem great! Thank you, Mirha.
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That seat over there it bears my name
Alone
No more fires shall crackle
Tinsel now aglow
We come from the earth
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